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Hay un concurso de literatura para historias cortas en mi escuela. Se supone que debemos de entregar nuestras historias mañana, pero me esta entrando un poco de pánico de ultimo minuto y francamente me da algo de pena entregar la mía.
Aún estoy a tiempo para volver a imprimir con ediciones si algo esta mal, o de solo borrar el progreso que he hecho hasta ahora si de plano no puedo salvar mi trabajo, entonces esperaba poder obtener opiniones de ultimo minuto por parte de la comunidad aquí.
Los posters de levelup me han salvado el trasero antes. Si les interesa leer la historia, esta publicada aquí:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/10gmGvb5dVV5tMspIlp1iTa4vYBvv0JaN0VokyoqUjeI/edit?usp=sharing
Criticas e ideas son bienvenidas.

EDICIÓN: Compañeros, el concurso se ha cerrado y la historia ha sido presentada. Ahora no queda mas que ver como resultan las cosas.

Desgraciadamente, no fui capaz de arreglar todos los problemas que señalaron, pero hice todo lo que pude, e incluso sentí que el resultado final era decente :)

Varios de los comentarios que recibí señalaron que la historia parecía incompleta o falta de cohesión. Este fue un gran error mio: Ana y su historia no fueron diseñadas para caber en cuatro paginas. Es un personaje en el que he estado trabajando por un largo tiempo, y espero poder integrarla a uno de mis proyectos mayores algún día.

Al final, creo que el trabajo final tiene buenas oportunidades de ganar, y eso no sería así si no fuera por la ayuda de todos ustedes. Gracias, comunidad de level, por ser tan servicial y amable como siempre. ¡Deseenme suerte!

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